Module 2 has failed

Resubmission: 18 Aug 08

Well presented work, but the abstract should contain some key findings – it is more than an introduction. Some grammatical and syntax errors. The word count I make 2977 – this is short of the minimum of 3600 and represents missed opportunity. It is at odds with the stated word count, but the candidate seems to have counted the entire paper.

The introduction sets the scene quite well and ends with key factors in successful implementation. It may have been worth using these to form the structure of the assignment.

The following 3 sections on CDSS seems surplus to the requirements of this assignment. They seem to focus on the elements of a successful EHR rather than factors in its successful implementation. I accept that there may be some overlap, but implementation must be made explicit.

The ‘Managing Change’ and ‘Discussion’ sections are better targeted. The writing style is lacking in an academic approach, and seems to suggest approaches rather than explore them. The referencing is adequate to limited, but tends to rely on relatively few authors – Sanchez seems to feature very heavily.

Overall – the remit of the assignment has slid a little and those sections which are pertinent are lacking in rigour. 44%